That is it I have had it no more saying I’M GONNA BE LAST because do you know how it feels to be the one that is always left out, and it seems to be that only Lily & Iris are the only ones that acutely want to stand at the back with meJ.
‘’Hay how about every-one takes turns at be at the back, front and middle’’ suggested Iris. Every-body started to laugh but then the teacher acutely thought it was a good Idea so she told every-body eminently to stop laughing. From that day us girls had massive fun.
3 thoughts on “Scarlett’s week 7 100 wc”
I love your opening sentence Scarlett. It really grabbed my attention so that I wanted to read on, maybe you could have shortened it though because I started to run out of breath reading it! I think there was a typing error when you wrote the word ‘acutely’. Look it up in the dictionary and see if you can find a word that makes more sense in that sentence. Your teacher sounds like a very reasonable lady! Keep up the writing Scarlett, you use such interesting story ideas.
I love your opening sentence Scarlett. It really grabbed my attention so that I wanted to read on, maybe you could have shortened it though because I started to run out of breath reading it! I think there was a typing error when you wrote the word ‘acutely’. Look it up in the dictionary and see if you can find a word that makes more sense in that sentence. Your teacher sounds like a very reasonable lady! Keep up the writing Scarlett, you use such interesting story ideas.
Great job but it sounded like a conversation rather than a story try make it better next time great job front brodie
I loved your story but what was with the specs in between your writing.great job